Chapter 1-Undercover

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Chapter 1-Undercover

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"Jack Kayner, one of the most feared criminals in the galaxy is on the loose. Deputy Jayson Kenlin and Vars Eclo were on duty when they escaped..." the voice crackled over a radio in one of Yavin IV's many casino's.

Dax was undercover. Rebel prescense on this planet was quite high, and he didn't want an outbreak. He was sent here on a mission to get estimates on Yavin IV's Gangs, Mobs and Clans. Most notely, he was to find estimates for the gang Deaath (not a misspelling).

Original estimates were around 3,000 active and about 300 scattered around , but that was proven wrong a few months later. Currently, they guessed about 9,000 active and about 50 scattered around.

Dax's eyes turned to a strange visitor coming to the casino, but Dax immediately recognized him: Vick Nielson. Dax paused and thought. How should I handle this? I want to get some Q & A...maybe I should just listen...
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Now that was a short chapter...
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Haven't finished it yet...I'm a slow writer
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You make indeed no understatement when you say that you are a slow writer.
Just to be sure. You do know that an average human being has a lifespan of about 80 years right? :p
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haha! :)

Sorry, but I haven't been on in a while and I stopped writing this series...it really stinks, but I've been really busy in the last week. Oh, well, I was planning on making a whole series of them....
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At first I was going to discontinue this, but the more I thought about it, I wanted to continue it. So here's my story. It may be a little rough because I haven't written a story since January.


============STORY=============
LATER THE SAME DAY

The 19th Elite Platoon, a squad in the GE army, set up HQ around a nearby compound. The compound was small, and the walls were less than 10’ high, but it’d have to do.
Dax was in command of the platoon of 56 soldiers. The compound had 4 sections, and he ordered 18 in each section. Along with that, each person was armed with a E-11 blaster and a knife. However, Dax ordered 5 machine guns for extra safety.

A FEW HOURS LATER

Dax walked up into Section D. He peered out. Wow. This looks cool he thought. Just then, a blaster shot hit the wall, just inches from where Dax’s hand gripped the wall. The next second, he heard hundreds of gunshots ring out. And a couple yells.
Even though it took him a few seconds to realize what’s going on, Dax was able to get up.
“Qu’il!” he shouted to the second-in-command officer who was manning a machine gun. “Keep firing! I’ll see if I can get contact from a orbiting Star Destroyer or nearby base!” Dax sprinted away down the stairs to the base of the compound when he met 8 Cobra Squad members.
“Get up to Section D stat!”
Dax expected some kind of response, but the troopers ran up to Section D without saying a word.
Next, he took a sharp turn to the left into the communications center. He took a seat and fiddled with the controls. Dang it, can’t get a response he thought.
He then switched channels from Z209 to Z210, the backup Imperial channel, and finally got a response.
“Hello?” he asked
“Who’s there?” came the reply.
“Dax.”
“Okay, what’s the problem?”
“Our HQ, the Aliskan Compound located on Yavin IV, is under attack.”
“Okay…got it.”
“And we need reinforcements!”
“Alright, standby.”
Dax waited. Valuable seconds went by until the response came back.
“We are unable to send any right now. However, we have supplies and ammo.”
“Uh, thanks, but never mind.”

Dax waited minutes. About 15 minutes went by before the gunshots slowed until there was about 5 per minute. Then none.

Just a few seconds after gunfire ended, a Jack Qu’il came running down the stairs.
“Dax!” he shouted once he got to the bottom.
“Yes?”
“Good news. The attackers have retreated. We found out the attackers were from two insurgent groups: Deeath and Kill Squad.”
“Good…” Dax paused. “What’s the casualty reports?”
“We have 6 dead and 19 wounded. They have about 20 dead and 30 wounded. We managed to capture 1 of them.”
“Alright, here’s the next thing to do: send all the dead and wounded to the nearby hospital and take a transport and bring the prisoner up to a nearby Star Destroyer.”
Jack was about to turn before Dax interrupted him.
“One more question: did they breach the walls?”
“No, but I don’t think this fort can hold another attack like this one.”

==============================TO BE CONTINUED==============================
I know this is completely off-topic, but I think this website should have a wiki to hold all information about this website in it. Any files, documents, people, units or battles could be put in the wiki.
Just a suggestion.
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Alright, I'm working on Part 3 for this series...

I think I should be finished in a couple of days
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Wow geez I've totally forgotten about this...eh, I'll just leave it to die.
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